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wildheart 11-11-2018 08:03 PM

The Great Loon Hunt

Another story done. Sophie has set up a treasure hunt for Holly. Of course itís no ordinary treasure hunt...


ChillinHaze 13-11-2018 05:35 AM

Re: The Great Loon Hunt
There is something I've been observing lately on your stories and that is that they all seem kinda forced.
The flow of most passages is somewhat off and even jumpy at times.

Also another thing I noticed is that all your characters (except Jenny) developed into being dommes with a sadistic streak, though to different degrees sadistic but during sexual play they all more or less seem the same, which is making these encounters increasingly uninteresting. The diversity in personalities is missing that makes for a good read, because everyone seems to act the same. The most interesting parts are really when Jenny appears because her shy behaviour is so refreshing in contrast to all the other girls being so utterly dominant and even trying to always one up each other on that part.

Sorry for the harsh words but I think this had to be mentioned.

wildheart 13-11-2018 08:59 AM

Re: The Great Loon Hunt
That is true come to think of it. I guess Iíve written so many from the same series, that Iím not putting as much thought in as I used to. Iíll probably going to take a break for a while while I make that game Iíve been working on, then maybe do a couple of one-off stories with completely new characters.

Thanks for opening my eyes, you donít always notice that sort of thing when youíve been writing the same sort of stories for a while. I guess all series start to die off after a while, and Iíve definitely done a lot of them.

loonerfun00 13-11-2018 07:36 PM

Re: The Great Loon Hunt
My advise would be to write some stand alone stories with new characters and personalities. Try including a straight guy and his girlfriend, just to change from the usual lesbian action.

by forcing yourself to create new identities in a fresh new environment, you might end up with more inspiration and a larger set of scenarios and new stuff to include in your main series.

Just try to write something very new, something you've never thought about writing, and then a new set of vocabulary and ideas will surely pop into your mind.

your stories are amazing wildheart! have a nice day.

wildheart 13-11-2018 09:41 PM

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Thanks. I did do a completely non fetish erotic story not that long ago. It was a nice change and I could experiment with new characters and scenarios. As it was a non fetish story, it was more important to focus on the characters. I’ll give the link for any one that’s interested.

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