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Old 13-03-2016, 02:09 PM
marja
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Default Re: Looner birthday part 2
Hi Wildheart!

I like your stories! I am just wondering about the character development. At the beginning of the story you write they did a b2p race together. Lateron she says she is still scared to do a b2p. That's a bit strange to me. For me the story could be a bit more realistic if she develops her fetish a bit slower.
But I really like your writing!
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