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Old 08-09-2018, 05:10 AM
Joe Sixpanel Joe Sixpanel is offline
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Default Re: Finally finished another
I enjoy all your stories. Keep it up! I really want to read about every detail of the inflatables, and the feelings of the girls bowing up the balloons (and especially beach balls!) as well as the girls watching the inflatables grow tight.

I like Jenny in the stories, but would play up her fear a bit more. She's a little too brave with the blow-to-pops for someone who truly has a phobia. Just my two cents.
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