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Old 11-11-2018, 06:32 PM
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Default What makes a good story?
Changing my approach slightly.

In your opinion, what makes a good looner story? What elements should be included to make it an enjoyable read?
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Old 11-11-2018, 07:03 PM
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I like stories about couples who engage in looning. But at the end of the day, it's each other that they ultimately love.
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Old 11-11-2018, 08:06 PM
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It depends if you’re going for a short one off story or a longer series. In a longer story or series, I find character development to be important. In shorter stories it has to have a good plot and be something a bit different. Try to think of something that no one’s done before.
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Old 11-11-2018, 09:22 PM
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Default Re: What makes a good story?
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I like stories about couples who engage in looning. But at the end of the day, it's each other that they ultimately love.
Second this. How's progress on my story that I suggested?
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Old 11-11-2018, 11:16 PM
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I think the characters need to have some kind of personality. I like stories where we get some insight into their relationships and how they interact with balloons. How do they react when balloons pop? I also like when they talk about what they're going to do -- teasing and foreshadowing. Of course, physical description and detail helps to put us in the scene.

I've seen a few stories where the characters are literally just there to have sex with, or there to pop balloons — they're a cardboard cutout in all other regards. I think those stories are less appealing.
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Old 11-11-2018, 11:47 PM
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Yeah, make sure they’re fleshed out characters with a personality.
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Old 12-11-2018, 12:02 AM
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Default Re: What makes a good story?
I personally find that unique descriptions with over exaggerated details make up a nice story. For me, there's a difference between

"she blew the balloon"

and

"she put the balloon between her lips and blew"

but even better, is this:

"She grabbed the balloon with her fingers and gently opened her mouth. Her tongue greeted the mouthpiece which got completely coated in the pool of saliva. The neck, now submerged in her mouth, was covered with pink lipstick which left her mark on the balloon in the most feminine way possible. Her chest suddenly expanded trying to get as much air as possible before releasing it inside the balloon which started to gain pressure and inflate."
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Old 12-11-2018, 11:39 PM
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Originally Posted by loonerfun00 View Post
I personally find that unique descriptions with over exaggerated details make up a nice story. For me, there's a difference between

"she blew the balloon"

and

"she put the balloon between her lips and blew"

but even better, is this:

"She grabbed the balloon with her fingers and gently opened her mouth. Her tongue greeted the mouthpiece which got completely coated in the pool of saliva. The neck, now submerged in her mouth, was covered with pink lipstick which left her mark on the balloon in the most feminine way possible. Her chest suddenly expanded trying to get as much air as possible before releasing it inside the balloon which started to gain pressure and inflate."




Yes. That's the way to say it.
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Old 13-11-2018, 06:19 AM
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Hi,

To me it makes a story great when I can identify myself with the characters and/or the situation. This makes the story come to life so to speak.

In order for this to happen focus need to be on feelings and emotions instead of pure ‘action’. It is also important that the story has some realism to it. I sometimes get the feeling that stories are a bit too much actually. I can maybe illustrate it with comparing to crime stories: Some authors need many horrible murders to keep the reader ‘caught’, but the story is more like ‘just’ entertaining instead og being really captivating. Great authors can do with a single murder or mystery in a way that completely captures the mind of the reader and drags her/him into the World of the story and doesn’t let go, sometimes even long after the story is read to its end.

The difference - or at least a very important part of it - is that the great story makes the Reader identify with the story and sort ‘step into the movie’ instead of just standing on the sideline watching.

I imagine it would be possible to write a very exciting story about this with balloons without having unrealisticly many balloons being popped or ridden or whatever. Just one single balloon or maybe a couple would be enough. Instead the story could center on the feelings and emotions of the characters and leave the ‘balloon action’ as maybe the climax of the story. Too much action is (to me) sort like Christmas every day - it rather quickly looses its appeal.

Does this make any sense?

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Old 13-11-2018, 06:19 AM
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Diversity and Details

I would say these are two of the core elements that make up a good story.
Characters can have the same kink for example but might actually indulge in it in very contrasting ways.
Their approaches to the same end result can be very different.
Of course this is also applicable to the setting and location. Why just have it play in the bedroom or even the house? It could happen on a boat or any other place you would least expect it.
Or through a means that you normally don't think of.

And details are what makes a story more palpable and vivid. Putting in the right details in the right amount may make the difference between making it just a hollow fantasy or something that is living and breathing, trying to suck the reader into it's grasp giving them a most enjoyable and memorable experience.

Also with reoccurring characters it's important to give more and more insight into their inner workings.
How do they see the object of their kink?
How do they approach it?
What do they think an eventual partner thinks and feels about it?
Do they change their views about it over time?
Or maybe they don't because they are actually already at the point were they are most comfortable with it.
Then it should be shown in which way that expresses itself or how they came to that point.

Lots of nuances that can help shape a character in one way or the other.
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