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Old 04-01-2019, 06:29 AM
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Hey Folks,

Just wanted to take this opportunity to take feedback on my stories that I have written here so far :

1. My teacher blows

2. Grandmom's teasing b2p

3. My maid and the balloons

4. Balloon fetish with Padma Aunty

5. The Speckled Heart Balloons


Please share your genuine feedback on the above. What you liked, didn't like, etc. It will help me write better stories and entertain you folks more.

Also it will be great if you can rank the above stories from 1 to 5 with 1 being the best.
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Old 04-01-2019, 09:32 AM
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Absolutely amazing stories by u. They are lucid, simple and interesting. Keeps the reader hooked for sure!

1. My teacher blows

This story made me fill with excitement at the starting but ended abruptly and quick. The sequence was good but I think you should have added some more balloon elements or perhaps some more detail of the teacher while she blows the balloon.
Rating: 2

2. Grandmom's teasing b2p

Well, to be exact I didn't feel anything in this coz it was a family member I suggest u to choose some other family member for such stories coz some people might gross out and leave such amazing story unfinished.

Rating: 1

3. My maid and the balloons

This one is my one of the fav stories in this forum. It has perfect element of anticipation while seeing someone blow, the tension of balloon tending to burst, teasing factor, etc. It would have been more exciting if the aunty would hav started blowing in front of u commanding u to sit glued to the chair and watch her; teasing to b2p it and deflating the balloon and again reinflating it to pop.

Rating: 4 and a half

4. Balloon fetish with Padma aunty

This story is the best one created by u. Getting caught offguard by a sexy aunty is really a big turn on to me and to many of them perhaps! I love every bit of this story and it guarantees me a huge turn on whenever I read it! But what happened the next day aftee tht fateful night? Who freed him from his agony?
Rating: 5

5. The speckled heart balloons

This story really gives a boner as I can imagine a sexy lady sitting on a chair with her legs crossed and blowing a balloon tightly. What a feast to the eyes!

Rating: 4


Looking forward to more stories from you!
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Old 04-01-2019, 09:50 AM
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Hey Hans,

Thanks a lot for the valuable feedback..Will definitely help me write better stories..
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Old 04-01-2019, 10:21 AM
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U r welcome
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